kokujomaru mellos Zanpaku-to

Name: Kokujomaru

Manifestation:

Spoiler:

Release Phrase: Devour, Kokujomaru

Family: Illusions/dark

Level:Bankai

Sealed Zanpaktou: a standard katana

Shikai: a 4 foot blade with various jagged and very sharp spikes.

Shikai Ability: a dark ring appears around my enemy for 1 if they do'nt escape it paralyses my enemy and captures them in a illusion where they see nothing but darkness for 2 posts. 5 post cooldown

Bankai: In Bankai Mellos zanpaktou turns into a scythe (much more powerful than an average zanpakutou and is light weight yet still powerful.) like the one his manisfestation carries and his skin also gets his skin painted black with a skeleton pattern and the white on his cptain jacket turns black and the black on his captain jacket turns red.

Bankai Ability: All shadows for a 2km radius freeze in place (Even his and his opponents shadows) Mello can then bend them into any shape he likes. He can sharpen them to a point or pull them off the ground to form shields (although they are pretty weak shields)

Techniques
Shikai
1st technique: Grand Shadow Cross slash *all forms*: if captured by my shikai Mello can release a powerful illusion in
which his shadow splits in half forms 2 skewers and cuts a huge X shape on their torso,but outside of the illusion they're not injured at all, if although they do feel the pain. not caught in shikai Mello needs to have physical contact to begin the illusion. i don't have a bankai yet but if i get one then the attack is multiplied by 4. 2 post cooldown.

2nd technique:Shadow seed *all forms*: if in released form on each of the jagged points get a small dark flare on each point if any of the flare makes contact it puts my enemy into an illusion where they appear to get weaker slowly while outside of the illusion they're slowly being drained of their reiatsu stopping them from using techniques for 3 posts
6 post cooldown.

3rd technique:shadow relocation:*outside of shikai and bankai* Mellos Zanpaku-to turns into shadows completely and
seeps down his body until it reaches his shadow mello slowly sinksinto his shadow he can then emerge from a shadow within a short distance unless realy close by it makes his reiatsufairly hard to trace this is both good for escaping and assasination.7 post cooldown.

Bankai
4th technique: Shadow arsenal: In addition to his zanpaktou, Mello can pull any weapon that he can think of out of a shadow. If he wants to switch weapons he has to put it back into a shadow. Cooldown/12 posts, Duration/5 posts

Your third technique is more of an ability. Make the technique have something to do with you're zanpaktou.

it's changed now and i'm keeping the ability

OK It's done it took 9 edits but it's done can someone please approve it

sorry i know I'm not an admin/mod but i see 3 skills but 2 diffrent abiliteys, that seems overly unfair. if you want a tip and really want to keep that abilitey maybe you should move it to your shikai abilitey? seeing as what you have there atm could easly be added in as a 100 post teck.

sorry ill stop backseat driveing now ><

thank you for your opinion but i'm happy with what i've written

What I don't understand

Illusions are.... well fake, and reading this, some of your tech's are confusing.

Grand Shadow Cross slash *all forms*: if captured by my shikai Mello can release a powerful illusion in
which his shadow splits in half forms 2 skewers and cuts a huge X shape on their torso


So... being an illusion, it doesn't hurt anything correct?


Your Last ability, that bloodlust thing, who gave you permission for an added ability?

no one i believe, Mello please delete one ability and be more clear on the illusion thing, illusions are illusions they are not to cause harm, but rather cause pain to the mind. having 2 abilities is undfair to other people on the site, as everyone else starts with one. you are not to have two unless authorized by Ekochi or Naraka, but since I do not see the authorization, I dont think it is approved. until you fix these things, you will not be approved, thankies~

it's fixed.

Approved

Bankai added

Yada yada touch me softly,


Approved

I better see candy cause of this