Falzar(vaizard)

Name:Falzar

Age:150

Age Visual:13

Ex-Division:Squad 1

Appearance:

Misterious guy with a cape on his back.Hes zanpaktou is on his back in a black hilt.Hes only friends are the vaizards.Hes helping the people in the real world and hes fighting shinigamis because hes instinct and seeking of battle.
(not really like him but whatever)

Personality:
Friendly with the people.Feared by the enemies.When he was at shinigami academy he was feared because in all his fights he didnt lose a time.

Background/History:
The Dream
He wanted to become a shinigami to protect the people who was dear to him and because he wanted to be respected

The Massacre
When he was little his family was murdered by a group of shinigamis but he didnt know about it

Hes first time as a shinigami
The time came and he passed the shinigami academy and he was send to the squad 1
In time,he was promoved to rank of vice-captain but because of his instinct and seeking of battle he was sent to do more missions

The Hollowfication
When he was on a patrol the 3rd Seat of Squad 1 told him that someone is killing the shinigamis in the wood
He went there quick and he found Aizen,Gin and Tousen killing the shinigamis and he fought them but he was no match for all of them and in the end he sensed something on his face that was his hollow mask and he feel asleep because he couldnt control that power
When he woke up he was in the cave that Yoruichi and Urahara made.
Then he trained much and in the end with the help of the others vaizards he surpassed his inner hollow.

Few things wrong with this application matey..

For one, the age is far too low, add another 100 years onto that at least.

Appearance could use a picture, or a somewhat actual ATTEMPT at describing it. Same with personality, one word isn't a personality. I'm personally expecting around 5 sentences for each, so try to add a little more.

History's a little vague, but so far it's the only thing I can see that's acceptable... Although ALL cannon characters are long dead in this RP.

Denied until further notice.

now its better i changed it just look up

He did not mean visual age...he meant real age

u mean age:150 and age visual:13?

Yes. Also your personality needs to be at least 1 paragraph long, your history at least two. Your application as it is right now is denied.

ok man personality have a paragraph,history have more and appearance 1 as well
i need to do anymore because i get sick of all this thing

someone respond please